You work for Barclay Interiors, a company that sells furniture and home decorating supplies such as curtains, cushions, bathroom accessories, mirrors, table linens, and so on. Rewrite the following email message to Helen Smith, editing for bias, "you" messaging, level of diction, clarity, and organization.
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Dear Mrs. Smith,
I know you like to shop at our store because we're a great company.
Every day we add new products. Lately, we have decided to stop offering our print catalogue, which never kept up with our inventory, and we are switching to an online catalogue because it is cheaper. Everybody needs to save money, right? Our online catalogue contains all of our products and includes photographs showing our complete range of colours as well. We think you will find it easy to use, too, because it has a search function.
To encourage you to use our new online catalogue we are offering you 15% off your first online order. Just type FIRSTORDER in the box labelled "discount."
We know we offer the best service around (everybody tells us that), and now, we think our online catalogue will serve you even better.
Have fun with the new catalogue!
http://barclayinteriors/catalogueSincerely,
Judith Henry
Sales Manager
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